Purr-fect cats

in writing we have been learning about persuasive writing.

we had to to decide if Miss McLeod should get a cat or a dog for a pet

we are learning about persuasive vocabulary and we had to highlight them in our work

i think Miss McLeod should get a Cat please read my persuasive writing to find out why  

writing 

new family booklet

for writing we had to make a new family information booklet. the new family booklet is for the new family who want to go to south hornby school 

New family booklet

Autumn wirting

we have been learning to make our writing more interesting. to do this we have been Re-crafting our writing. we used a describe map to which helps us plan our ideas in more detail. our topic was autumn. Each time we used better adjectives and similes. these are highlighted so we you see the adjectives 

my favorite thing about writing this is a different way to write            

this is the writng

Adjectives

Similes

My favourite sentence

 

Autumn writing

Attempt 1: Autumn is a season. the ground in Autumn is colorful because all of the leaves are on the ground. the weather gets colder because winter is coming. people are raking up leaves because they are dieing. the days get shorter because the sun rises later. Tomatoes are getting riper because the change of weather the grass does not grow as fast as it normally does because autumn is colder

Attempt 2: Autumn is a colorful cold season. the ground in Autumn is colorful a rainbow because red yellow and brown leaves are on the ground. the weather gets colder because snowy winter is coming. people are raking up leaves because they are dieing. the days get shorter because the burning hot orange sun rises later. Tomatoes are getting riper because the change of weather.  the grass does not appear as fast to grow normally does because autumn is freezing.

Attempt 3: Autumn is a beautiful cold season. the ground in Autumn is colorful a rainbow because red yellow and brown leaves are on the ground. the weather gets colder because snowy winter is coming. people are raking up leaves because the leaves they are kicking the bucket  .the days get shorter because the burning hot orange sun rises later. Tomatoes are getting riper because the change of weather.  the grass does not grow like it is as it is a jiffy because autumn is bitter.

Attempt 4: Autumn is a beautiful cold season. the ground in Autumn is colorful a rainbow because red yellow and brown leaves are on the ground. the weather gets colder because snow like winter is coming. people are raking up leaves because the leaves are kicking the bucket. the days get shorter because the burning hot orange sun rises later. Tomatoes are getting riper because the change of weather.  the grass does not grow like a jiffy because autumn is bitter.

Attempt 5: Autumn is a beautiful below zero season. the ground in Autumn is multi colored rainbow because red yellow and brown leaves are on the ground. the weather gets colder because snow like winter is coming. people are raking up leaves because they are the days get shorter because the burning hot orange sun rises later. Tomatoes are getting riper because the change of weather.  the grass does not grow in a split second because autumn is bitter.